Hello
remember me..
the girl that you see in the halls
starring at you
trying to make you notice her

She say the most weirdest things to you
When she trying to talk to you
She tries to hard and you can see it

All she wants ..
is you to give her a chance
Give up what your friends think of her
she may not have a pretty face
she dose not have the perfect body

What she has is her love for you
the type of girl you want on the inside
just not the type of girl on the outside

would you give up that part
and just make her your's

she would stay up all night when your sick
make you laugh when your sad
tell you your wonderful the way you are
think about all the time
lock her arms around you and never want to let go

Just not the type of girl you want on the outside


What do you think it is my first so yeah

Added the title indicator. ~Tweedy

__________________

made by Stalesoul

That sounded like a stalker note.

Lol im kidding it was ... actully creepy

if you like someone just go out and say it, " I LUV J00!!111!!!11!!" .....

he will be shocked and creeped out (at that moment).

becuase its usally the boys who say it

i think you have a crush on someone

__________________

Old Signatures (Refresh)

Amen to that brother.

Girls are too subtle <_< *glares*

Its a great poem... Its sweet, but if you like a guy you should just tell him. Even if your unsure how he feels about you the worst he can do is say 'No'. And if he is a nice guy he will do it nicely.... I know I would

__________________
‡ ‡ ‡ ‡
‡ ‡ ‡ ‡ ‡



--------------------------------------
Doughnut Juice ~ And you're not a normal user, you're like The One Village Staff to Rule Them All.
Henner ~ You're the coolest in my eyes, Gamestar.
Jared ~ You make me lose the game. :[
Rocky Martin ~ Substitute effect: buy less potatoes.

It sounds emo...Ginny....ew....You like someone...LOL YOU WROTE A SONG XD YOU NUB. (Shes my sister, making fun of her is implied.)

__________________


THANKS STALE & OWNAGE <3<3<3

I saw the same thing, if not the exact, on a spammed buliten on Myspace. Suffice to say, I'm not impressed.

__________________

I'll move this to the Literary society, where poems belong.

However if it isn't your poem, as Flea seems to be saying, if you don't own up there will be consequences.

__________________
Faint as a will o' the wisp
Crazy as a loon
Sad as a gypsy serenading the moon

In order of how horrible comments

66spookyKid66 be ashamed
Scoupe123 ditto

Flea I can find no such similar poem anywhere online
and trust me I can find about anything. Either supply the
link or stuff the accusations.

Back on topic
Aside from a few spelling typo's it does seem to go fine together
though does seem a bit choppy here and there. Personal taste
is that it's a little depressing and just a little too pessimistic for
my preferances, but the style's up to the one making it.

__________________
"The good warrior knows when to fight, and when to withdraw."
- Sun Tzu

I'll smith anything up to 93 smithing if you have the material for me to make it with
My Story, Horrors of Myron County
RV's Drawing archive topic, post yours or comment on others

Fairly nice, poem or a free flow of thought? Love, Good topic. Have a consistent format structure.



The change in structure was annoying. At the beginning the first letter of each line was capitalized, then drifting off into some capitalized, then no letters capitalized for a paragraph. Its minor but consistent structure helps keep attention.

Besides that only a few typo's.

Nice Job.

__________________
Happy Easter! Christ is Risen!

"We have just enough religion to make us hate, but not enough to make us love."~Jonathan Swift

I never made any accusation of plagirism, just saying that I've seen very similiar poems on myspace, usually followed with a "If you agree with this, send it to 5 friends by midnight and you will meet your true love" or some other sappy stuff like that. Sounds like someone has a guilty concious. Should I run across another buliten with the poem I'm thinking of, I'll make sure to PM the address to you.

Nice poem, my sister used to write poems too
At first, I got an image of the girl off The Ring in my head, the girl staring at me in the hall o.O

__________________

Tom wrote:

He was trying to steal back his stuff that had been stolen from him by private collectors using weapons that he said he didn't have and 5 random people he met at a wedding party?

I thought in was awesome in meaning, but a little shaky in execution. I assume that in the poem you suggest that we see people all around us who are beautiful on the inside, but because of our fears, our cliques, our simple prejudices we are too afraid to step out of our circles to reach out our hand to something new and unexpected, something perhaps a little more objectable to society. I do not see it as someone holding a guilty conscious, unless it’s us with the guilty conscious…

I can only say that you have accomplishing a feeling of expression.

I thought it was really sweet, and trust many other girls feel the exact same way. That was a very well written poem (except for a few typos, but those are overlooked), and the way you portrayed the girl (or yourself) was very interesting. I liked how it felt like we were inside her (your) head.