RV's JTA ni yōkoso!

ZxC · **Posted:** May 9th, 2011, 12:58 am

ルンヴィラジェ日本語翻訳アカデミーにようこそ

Run'viraje nihongo hon'yaku akademī ni yōkoso

Welcome to Runevillage's Japanese Translation Academy (JTA)

Hello everyone! If you've been in RV's chat during the past weeks, you might've seen me, Jackstick and occasionally Sawa-chan discussing Japanese translations. Basically, we took some screenshots from the Clannad game written in Japanese, and since then we've been trying to translate them. If you don't know what Clannad is, then I'm sorry but we cannot be friends. Just kidding
Now that we've made some progress, I thought that it would be a good idea to share our work with you guys. I will be updating this thread periodically.
The format will go like this : First I will show you the picture, then the text in Japanese followed by its rōmaji counterpart. I will hide our translation using spoilers so you guys can have a shot at it too.

We would also be very pleased to discuss the Japanese language with anyone interested. I am currently learning it, and trust me : this little exercise has taught me lots of stuff. If you find errors in our translations, feel free to mention them. I'll gladly correct them (and learn something along the way!)

So, without further ado, let's get started! がんばってください

一 (いち / ichi / 1) : Picture #1

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手を重ねるということを意識しているのか、さっきに比べ僅かに手の平の感触が固い。

Te o kasaneru toyuu koto o ishiki shiteiru no ka, sakki ni kurabe wazuka ni tenohira no kanshoku ga katai.

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二 (に / ni / 2) : Picture #2

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古河　[だんご大家族は大家族なんです。だから、たくさんいるんです]

Furukawa [Dango daikazoku wa daikazoku nan desu. Dakara, takusan iru n desu]

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三 (さん / san / 3) : Picture #3

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その女生徒が俺の存在に気づき、手を止めていた。

Sono onna seito ga ore no sonzai ni kizuki、shu o tomete ita.

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四 (し / shi / 4) : Picture #4

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智代　[そう、女心は複雑というやつだ。これは、女の子らしくはないか]

Tomoyo [Sou, onnagokoro wa fukuzatsu toyuu yatsuda. Kore wa, onnanokorashiku wanai ka]

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五 (ご / go / 5) : Picture #5

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真剣なまなざしと、自分の家のようなくつろいだ格好が、不釣り合いだった。

Shinkenna manazashi to, jibun no ie no youna kutsuroida kakkou ga, fu tsuriaidatta.

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六 (ろく / roku / 6) : Picture #6

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ことみ　[ご本を粗末にあつかったら、ダメ]

Kotomi [Go hon wo somatsu ni atsukattara, dame]

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七 (しち / shichi / 7) : Picture #7

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智代　[好きな人のために作る、愛情のこもった料理だ]

Tomoyo [Sukina hito no tame ni tsukuru, aijou no komotta ryourida]

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八 (はち/ hachi / 8 ) : Picture #8

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朋也　[次の楽しいこととか、うれしいことを見つければいいだけだろ]

Tomoya [Tsugi no tanoshii koto toka, ureshii koto wo mitsukereba ii dakedaro]

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九 (きゅう / kyū / 9) : Picture #9

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芳野　[俺のギター、聴きたいんじゃなかったのか]

Yoshino [Ore no “gitaa”, kikitai n janakatta no ka]

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十 (じゅう / Jū / 10) : Picture #10

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杏　[もちろん一発合格。んでもって新車なのよ。新車♪]

Kyou [Mochiron ichi-hatsu goukaku. N de motte shinshana no yo. Shinsha♪]

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十一 (じゅいち / Jū ichi / 11) : Picture #11

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春原　[キル。。。ミーーッ！]

Sunohara [kiru... mi--ッ!]

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十二 (じゅに / Jū ni / 12) : Picture #12

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 杏 [ふっふ~ん、おいしいでしょ。ちょっと自信作なのよねえ~]

Kyou [Fuffu~n, oishiidesho. Chotto jishin-sakuna no yo ne e~]

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十三 (じゅさん / Jū san / 13) : Picture #13

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宮沢　[岡崎朋也さん、通り名　「千のかさぶたを持つ男」 、でいいですか?]

Miyazawa [Okazaki Tomoya-san, tōrina 「sen no kasabuta o motsu otoko」, de iidesu ka?

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十四 (じゅし/ Jū shi / 14) : Picture #14

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杏 [もしさ、あんたのこと好きって子がいたら付き合う?]

Kyou [Mo shi-sa, anta no koto suki tte ko ga itara tsukiau?]

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十五 (じゅご / Jū go / 15) : Picture#15

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椋 [じゅ。。。授業は。。。ちゃんと出た方がいいと思います]

Ryou [Ju..Jugyō wa..chanto deta hō ga ii to omoimasu]

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Here's another set of pictures

一 (いち / ichi / 1) : Picture #1

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縁側に腰を下ろし、庭を眺めていた。

Engawa ni koshi o oroshi, niwa o nagamete ita.

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二 (に / ni / 2) : Picture #2
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2.1 庭を見回すと、池のそばで背中を丸めて座り込み、こっちの様子を窺っていた。

Niwa o mimawasuto,-chi no soba de senaka o marumete suwarikomi, kotchi no yōsu o ukagatte ita.

2.2 風子はご機嫌な様子で、犬のしっぽのように両足をぷらぷら振りながらお菓子を頬張る。

Fuuko wa go kigen'na yōsu de,-ken no shippo no yō ni ryōashi o purapura furinagara okashi o hōbaru.

2.3 「確か、昭和の中頃だったの..」

「Tashika, Shōwa no nakagorodatta no..」

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おめでとうございます

Jackstick · **Posted:** May 9th, 2011, 1:16 am

Love the topic, yay JTA! ^_^

For those of you interested, This site is very helpful tool for finding and translating kanji. Pretty simple to use, too.

Fluffzter · **Posted:** May 10th, 2011, 7:10 pm

Hi guys.

Just throwing up what I would translate these as. Amateur translator of probably 100+ anime episodes, manga chapters etc, and finished 2 years of full-on university Japanese studies. Obviously, since there is limited context (AND JAPANESE NEEDS CONTEXT RAWR) some of these may be off, but this is what I'd throw them together as in English.

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ZxC · **Posted:** May 10th, 2011, 7:31 pm

Thanks a lot for helping! Here are my thoughts :

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Fluffzter wrote:

1: After he realized we were holding hands, he's grabbing me much tighter.

That makes sense, but I don't see where you're taking the "grabbing" part from. As for whether or not it's a he or a she, we couldn't tell because of the lack of context.

2: The big Dango family is a big family, so of course there's many of them!
(Obviously, this translation needs context as to whether she's talking about her dolls, or just the family, but this is my translation if I got only that frame.)

Makes sense. I'm pretty sure she's talking about the family, or maybe a drawing. But not about dolls.

3: As that female student [she] noticed me, her hand stopped.
(I hate translating word-for-word. It's stiff, and smells of bad translators. Not that I'm trying to be an arse, it's just my preference. :3 )

Well yes technically "she" would be appropriate, but 女生徒 cannot always be translated as "she" since it means "schoolgirl". That's why we've used that term.

4: Yup, a woman's heart is a mysterious thing. Don't you think this is feminine?
(Nowhere in this sentence it says "to a guy." I know I speak of liberal translations, but that's just changing the meaning.)

This one annoyed us. Could you tell me what "やつだ" means? We thought it might be a slightly rude way to refer to "a guy", but we couldn't find out for sure. The rest of your correction seems fair, although its pretty similar to ours.

5: [ Fuzzy Bunny

me, I'll do this one later. I don't think you've got the right idea, but I can't put mine into words right now.] When you look around, it really stings your eye how this place feels like your home.
[a? home, maybe. Context!]

The library part comes from said context. I'm pretty confident about our translation here. I guess that "a thorough observation" is slightly too wordy, but apart from that I think we got it right.

6: (I agree)

Great!

7: The food that you make for the person you love, is full of passion.

Okay so we weren't too far off. Thanks.

8: As long as you can find another thing that you enjoy or love, things will turn out allright.

Sorry, but I think our translation is actually better here. There's no "as long as [...] things will turn out allright" part.

9: Didn't you want to hear my guitar?
[Really, guys? Really? Now you were just being lazy.]

Yea after looking at it again I can see where I've messed up. Thanks.

10: (Agree, except I instead of I've. English grammar fail!)

Bleh sorry.

Fluffzter · **Posted:** May 10th, 2011, 8:11 pm

We fail at #5.

This was so obvious when this was pointed out to me. >_<;

"There was no balance between her serious expression and her homely presence."

まなざし means 'look' as in a face or expression, not look as in to look. >_<;;

ZxC · **Posted:** May 10th, 2011, 10:53 pm

Alright, many of the translations were corrected. Please check them because some were off by quite a bit earlier!
To everyone who's helped me : ありがとうございます

ZxC · **Posted:** May 11th, 2011, 12:23 am

DOUBLE POST :weird:

Added 2 new ones. Some of you might recognize them. I'm not sure about #12, so if someone could help it'd be greatly appreciated.

Fluffzter · **Posted:** May 12th, 2011, 1:29 pm

I've honestly got no idea about the meaning of 自信作, so I'm not gonna comment on that, but it looks correct-ish, but it probably isn't. ^,^

As for the rest, it's about what I'd translate them as. I'm sure the scabs one is a proverb and should have a better translation somewhere to be found, but I'm lazy and can't be butted to search for one

Pretty easy sentences this time though. ;3

EDUT: Asked around. 自信作 = Something you make that you're proud of. So the sentence would be. "It's delicious, innit? I'm really proud of it!"

ZxC · **Posted:** May 12th, 2011, 2:37 pm

Makes sense, but what about the `よねえ~` at the end? Doesn't that mean something like `don't you thinnnk?`

Fluffzter · **Posted:** May 12th, 2011, 6:24 pm

I had a whole 2 hour class session just the teacher trying to explain the differences in sentences when a different intonation is used, for example when ending with 'ne'. However, I didn't really pay attention. :oops:

ZxC · **Posted:** May 16th, 2011, 11:16 pm

Added some new pictures. They're quite Kanji-heavy this time.

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